Climbing Up a Tree (an original poem by me)

Climbing Up a Tree by Dahlia Djami 8B


He walked towards the tree, all big, round and brown, and decided that he'd challenge himself to go to the very top, and he did so, slowly but surely,
He placed his feet on branches, and held tight to the branches above his head with his hands,
he made sure that he held on to those branches tightly,
Unless of course, he wanted to tumble back down, which he accidently did when he was 5,
Slowly but surely, the man climbed up the big tree, always avoiding the thin branches, for he knew that it wouldn't support him,
Unless of course, he wanted to re-enact what happened to him when he was 10,
The birds chirping in the distance was his only source of company, but he didn't mind, because by then he was on the top, all safe and sound

Comments

  1. UnknownJanuary 9, 2018 at 11:07 PM

    Interesting approach! A lot of poems that I've read tend to keep it simple, but your use of words are complex and very touching..

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  2. TlogJanuary 9, 2018 at 11:09 PM

    Content-wise it is decent, but structure the poem better because it's only 6 long lines if you were to use the lines more effectively it might've been better.

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  3. UnknownJanuary 9, 2018 at 11:10 PM

    I like how your poem is composed of many adjectives and the story you created from climbing up a tree is amazing.

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  4. TiaraJanuary 9, 2018 at 11:11 PM

    I really found the poem quite interesting because of the way you referenced growing up through climbing a tree. It was very complex and creative!

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